The first Chapter

[kingfirehawx]

As Octavius, Gilthas and I, King Fire Hawx slayed the dragon head to recieve its precious but rare egg, the egg of the lost and damned from satans army. Octavius sliced, Gilthas diced, all i could hear was a roar from the dragon that was being slayed by the one and mighty Octavius and the lightning lord Gilthas. All i could do was sit in pain as my arm was sliced by the Behemoth dragon. i shouted " Im in pain help me" but by then Satans army had risen, The mighty Octavius and Gilthas retreated, abandoning me, but why?... why?......

From that moment all i could hear was satan's army shouting "Havast Havast the Mighty Octavius and Gilthas have retreated leaving there Puny Putrid Soldier King Fire Hawx.

JUst then i thought it was over, i heard a Thump! then Another Thump! it was getting faster and closer each time! Could it be, The mighty Ocatavius hasn't left me, either has Gilthas. The god's army led by Octavius and Gilthas has came to rescue. " Charge Let it be a war not one but not lost Satan!" All i heard were feet from each side running at each other. Gilthas came over to see if i was ok, " King Fire Hawx! are you ok?" he said
I rerplied to him, "im hanging in there Gilthas...."

Three days later i made a full recovery with a minor wound, The fight is on with Satans army...!

Sorry if this is a bit rubbish but there will be a chapter two-Three then a sequal. i didnt have lot's of time to make this but if you dont like just leave a comment, im a fair guy. this is my first ever story for a website ever! Thanks - King Fire Hawx

[Octavius]

Hmmm... A bit of constructive advice: you need to add a bit stronger of a beginning. Other than that is is pretty good for a first try.

[kingfirehawx]

Thank you very much Octavius, Thank you for the advice. Did you get Gilthas Message he sent you earlier? Me and Gilthas are good friends in real life. Thanks for the advice - King Fire Hawx

[geodain]

good story